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第17章 模板作文赏析(1)

记叙文15例

Directions:For this part,you are allowed thirty minutes to write an eye witness account of a traffic accident.You should write at Ieast 120words according to the outline given below in Chinese:

假设你在某日某时某地目击一起车祸,就此写下一分见证书。见证书必须包括以下几点:

1.车祸发生的时间及地点

2.你所见到的车祸情况

3.你对车祸原因的分析

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An Eye-witness Account of a traffic Accident

It was happened on the morning of this Sunday,I was walking towards the road near my home as usual,and suddenly I heard someone‘s screams.It impressed me most because it was out of expectation.

At first,all the people were waiting for the green Iight.And at the same time,a man who seemed that he was not notice the red light,and then he rushed into the road.It was most unlucky for the man who rushed out to be hit by a truck running at full speed.At Iast,with the sound of emergency brake,the truck stopped but the man fell down,when the policeman came,the situation was quickly under control.

On my way back to my home,the traffic accident was caused by the people was not comply with the traffic rule.I thought a Iot,which is because the man didn’t put the traffic regulation in his heart,and moreover the truck driver was also blamed if he had slowed down at the crossroad.If we are always ready to care every danger things,we will reduce these dangerous accidents happening in the future.

(2003.6CET-4)

妙语评析:这是一篇混合型记叙文,既叙述了事件又分析事件发生的原因。第一段点出了车祸发生的时间与地点,以及车祸发生带来的感受。叙述比较规整又呼应了题目。第二段详细介绍了车祸发生时的情况,层次分明。第三段写了我对车祸的看法,并分析了车祸的原因。最后一句又总结了应该怎样去避免危险的发生。文中用黑体标出的句子是记叙文常见句式,又是此文章中的骨干句。

句型模板

1.It was happened on the_________,I was_________.

2.It impressed me most because_________.

3.And at the same time,_________,and then_________.

4.I thought a Iot,_________,and moreover_________.

全文模板

Topic

It was happened on the_________,I was_________.It impressed me most because_________.

At first,_________.And at the same time,_________,and then_________.It was most unlucky for_________.At Iast,_________,when_________,the situation_________.

On my way back to_________.I thought a Iot,_________,and moreover_________.If we are always ready to_________.

Directions:For this part,you are allowed 30minutes to write a short essay in honor of teachers on the occasion of Teacher‘s Day.You should write at Ieast 120words following the outline given below:

1.向老师致以节日祝贺。

2.从一件难忘的事回忆老师的教诲和无私的奉献。

3.我如何回报老师的关爱。

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Teachers’Day

With the coming of Teacher‘s Day,all the students are eager to express their respect for their teachers.So it is of great importance for me to show my best wishes for my dearest teacher,Mr.Miao.On one hand,I wish him a happy holiday.On the other hand,I want to thank him for all the work he has done for me.

When it happened,I still remember that when we were preparing the exam of entering into college.Most my classmates were working hard and we also have a Iot of pressure.My parents are working in Beijing;nobody takes care of me at that time.Just at the moment,Mr.Miao came to my home and told me that you should be more adamancy than other classmates and make a good result for your parents.It impressed me most because he talked about the importance of studying and emphasized that if I didn’t persist in my ambitions,I will lose one of the important chances in my life.

Considering all these,I believe that I should return his great love with my achievements.Firstly,I will study harder form now on.Secondly,I will devote myself to the development of our country as he dose in the future.At Iast,the enlightenment he gave me will always encourage me in my whole Iife.

(2005.6CET-4)

妙语评析:这是一篇混合型记叙文,文中既有记叙的成分也有感受表白。文中的三个段落分别对应提纲中的三点内容。文章内容完整,结构紧凑,短小精悍。文中用黑体标出的句子是记叙文常用句式,又是此文章中的核心句。

句型模板

1.On one hand,_________.On the other hand,_________.

2.When it happened,I still remember that_________.

3.It impressed me most because_________.

4.Considering all these,I believe that_________.

全文模板

Topic

With the coming of_________,_________are eager to express their respect for_________.So it is of great importance for me to show my best wishes for_________.On one hand,_________.On the other hand,_________.

When it happened,I still remember that_________.It impressed me most because_________.

Considering all these,I believe that_________.Firstly,_________,Secondly,_________.At Iast,_________.

Directions:For this part,you are allowed 30minutes to write a composition on the topic The Day My CIassmate Fell lll(or Got Injured).You should write at Ieast 120words according to the outline given below in Chinese:

1.简单叙述一下这位同学生病(或受伤)的情况。

2.同学、老师和我是如何帮助他/她的。

3.人与人之间的这种相互关爱给我的感受是……

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The Day My Classmate Fell Ill

During the SARS period in this spring,the year of 2003,one of my classmates,Li ming,was struck down by the virus and was immediately sent to hospital.

The news spread quickly on campus.At first,we were terrified and wondered if we were infected too.However,through our government‘s publicity on mass media,we gradually conquered the fear and set out to try out best to help him.Some teachers provided daily necessities while some students recorded the English class contents for him so that Li ming could not be Ieft behind.With our care and concern,Li ming recovered quickly.

Such an incident teaches us a good moral.Our society is full of Iove,warm and peaceful,in which people-from man to woman,from individual to individual-Iend others a hand.Just Iike a famous song goes,“the world will turn into heaven only if everyone contributes a Iittle.”And I do believe that it’s my great honor to live in this love-filled paradise.

(2003.9CET-4)

妙语评析:这是一篇混合型记叙文,既叙述了事件又说明了感受。本文严格紧扣提纲来写。文章切题,论证丰富生动,表达思想清楚,文字通顺,连贯性较好。文中用黑体标出的句子既能突出主题又是亮点,适合作为经典句子背诵。

句型模板

1.At first,_________.

2.Such an incident teaches us_________.

3.Just Iike a famous song goes,“_________.”

4.And I do believe that_________.