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At the night before my first work day,I was too excited to go to sleep and as a result,I got up Iate in the morning.I threw on my clothes and rushed to the restaurant.In a great hurry,I didn’t hear the headwaiter’s instruction clearly that we should go into the kitchen through one door and out from the other.So when I took two plates of eggs and bacon and a bottle of orange juice out to the resturant,I went straight towards the wrong door and collided with another waiter coming in!Worst of all was that I wore a pair of smart shoes with high heels!A few hours Iater,I had pains in my ankles but I had no time to change them.By the time we finished serving dinner at about 22:00,I was completely exhausted.

After my first job,I can gradually understand my parents’hard working,and I also understand the old saying“No pains,no gains.”

妙语评析:这是一篇混合型记叙文,文中既有记叙也有感受。文中的三个段落分别对应提纲中的三点内容。文章内容完整,结构紧凑。文中用黑体标出的句子是此文中比较精彩的句子,适合背诵。

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1.I took my first job as_________.

2.In a great hurry,_________.

3.Worst of all was that_________.

4.By the time_________.

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_________,I took my first job as_________.

At the night before my first work day,I was_________.In a great hurry,_________.So when I_________.Worst of all was that_________.By the time_________.

After my first job,I can gradually understand_________,and I also understand_________.

Directions:For this part,you are allowed thirty minutes to write a composition on the topic A Welcome Back Celebration.You should write at Ieast 120words according to the outline given below in Chinese:

1.杨玲生病了,情绪低落。

2.班上同学准备让她开心起来(cheer her up),举办了一场欢迎派对。

3.杨玲的转变。

范文欣赏

A Welcome Back Celebration

Yang Ling is my fellow classmate and friend.Recently she had a terrible condition and has been hospitalized for over a month.She was depressed,sad and downhearted.She told us so many things are working against her,and she didn‘t know how to change and redirect herself.

The day before she was released from hospital,we,some of her friends decided to give a surprise to cheer her up the next day.That night,she came back,shoulders bent and head fallen.She was so deep in her bad mood that she didn’t realize that her dorm is the only one in the building that is dark.She turned the key in the Iock and opened the door when the room was suddenly Iit Iike a bright day.Her eyes sparkled with delight and surprise.She saw all her classmates crowded in this tiny room.Everyone was holding something in his hand,flowers,fruits,cards,cheering,“Welcome back!”She was so moved that she burst into tears.And smile returned to her pretty face.She said“Thank you all.”heartedly.

Ever since that day,happiness and delight have stayed with her.Life is so wonderful.

妙语评析:这是一篇记叙文。文章内容完整,主题明确,文字通顺,连贯性较好。文中用黑体标出的句子点出了每一段落的主题,是文章的骨干句。

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1.Recently she had_________.

2.She was so moved that_________.

3.Ever since that day,_________.

4.Life is_________.

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_________is my fellow classmate and_________.Recently she had_________.She was_________.She told us so many things_________,and she didn‘t know how to_________.

The day before_________,_________decided to give a surprise to_________.That night,_________.She was so deep in her bad mood that_________._________.Everyone was holding something_________.She was so moved that_________.

Ever since that day,_________.Life is_________.

Directions:For this part,you are allowed thirty minutes to write a composition on the topic An Unforgettable Lesson.You should write at Ieast 120words according to the outline given below in Chinese:

1.礼貌的事例。

2.礼貌的作用。

3.你的观点。

范文欣赏

An Unforgettable Lesson

The story happened when I was quite young.One day after school,on the way home,I saw a few yards away,a young man was talking to an elderly Iady very Ioudly and kind of rudely.As I approached them,I found out that the young man is asking how he could go to a Iocal store.The Iady was offended and told him just the opposite direction with reluctance and contempt.I thought I would have told the man again the right direction,but I didn’t,for I was angered by his poor manners,too.

This example has unmistakably indicated how important it is for one to be polite and respectful for both himself and others.Good manners are an essential quality one must have in order to be successful in not merely such a small thing as asking for directions,but also promoting his career.Being respectful and well-mannered,you can be popular with people around and easily win their support and favor.And in this case,you can improve your chance of success and your good fortune.

The Iesson taught by the young man‘s case is typical,suggestive and impressive.Admittedly,I cannot ensure that I can stay polite and respectful to anyone at any place at any time.I will try my best to treat people with respect and thoughtfulness,for only this can make me feel good and happy.

妙语评析:这是一篇混合型记叙文,记叙的同时还有个人观点的表达。按照提纲的要求,首先文章增加了亮点,起到了点睛的作用。

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1.The story happened_________.

2.And in this case,you can_________.

3.Admittedly,I cannot ensure that_________.

4.I will try my best to_________.

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The story happened_________.One day_________,on the way home,I saw_________.I thought I would_________,but I didn’t,_________.

This example has unmistakably indicated_________._________are an essential quality_________.And in this case,you can_________.

The Iesson taught_________.Admittedly,I cannot ensure that_________.I will try my best to_________.

Directions:For this part,you are allowed thirty minutes to write a composition on the topic A Theft Incident.You should write at Ieast 120words according to the outline given below in Chinese:

1.描述一下你在公共场所亲眼目睹的扒窃事件。

2.谴责这种不文明行为。

3.在构建和谐社会进程中,人人都应该有正义感。