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Friendship is to our life what salt is to dishes.When you are happy,friendship is just Iike adding flowers on the brocade;when you are sad,friendship is a dose of consolation;if you are in trouble,friends will surround you and remove the barriers for you;if you have a hard nut to crack,you can turn to friends for help.We admire the great friendship between Marx and Engel,which firmly combined them and pushed them forward on the road to exploring and fulfilling Communism.

Friendship isn’t almighty,but no one can live happily without it.

妙语评析:这是一篇关于社会生活的说明文。首先直接用题目引出了主题,即友谊是人生永恒的主题。文章简洁流畅,语言优美,对友谊这一主题说明的很到位。文中用黑体标出的句子是各段落的主题句,引导着全文的中心思想。

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1.There is no definite answer.

2.An eternal theme in Iiterature,friendship is_________.

3.When you are happy,friendship is_________;

4.when you are sad,friendship is_________;

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What does friendship mean?There is no definite answer.An eternal theme in Iiterature,friendship is_________.

Friendship is_________.When you are happy,friendship is_________;when you are sad,friendship is_________;if you are in trouble,friends will_________;if you have a hard nut to crack,you can_________.We admire the great friendship_________.

Friendship isn‘t almighty,but no one can Iive happily without it.

Direction:For this part,you are allowed 30minutes to write a composition on the topic Coaching Suggestions.You should write no Iess than 120words,and you should base your composition on the outline(given in Chinese):

1.教练要树立自己的威信;

2.教练要有耐心;

3.教练要善于听取运动员的建议。

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Coaching Suggestions

The coach should know his job clearly,not only his ability to coach but also his quality as a man.He should inspire confidence so that the players will exert their full effort in trying to execute each of his suggestions.

The coach should have patience.For instance,one of the most common faults in coaching is to expect too much of the players.There is a tendency for many coaches who were great players themselves to expect their players to move along as fast as they did.Give the players a chance to practise and develop physically and mentally.

The coach should maintain an open mind to suggestions from his players.For instance,if a player has suggested a play,I think it is wise to give him credit in front of the entire team.

妙语评析:这是一篇关于社会生活的说明文。文章严格按照提纲分为了三段。文章结构清晰,紧扣主题。文中用黑体标出的句子写得很精彩,是此文章的闪光点。

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1.The coach should_________,not only_________but also_________.

2.He should inspire confidence so that_________.

3.The coach should_________.For instance,_________.

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Topic

The coach should_________,not only_________but also_________.He should inspire confidence so that_________.

The coach should_________.For instance,_________.

The coach should_________.For instance,_________.

Direction:For this part,you are allowed 30minutes to write a composition on the topic The Most Influential Book in My Life.You should write no Iess than 120words,and you should base your composition on the outline(given in Chinese):1.简单介绍这本书。

2.这本书对“我”的影响和启示。

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The Most Influential Book in My Life

The Story of My Life by Helen Keller is the most influential book in my Iife.It abounds with courage,struggle and faith throughout.Helen Keller was once in deep despair in her childhood,but finally she decided to overcome her physical defects and Iive happily.Furthermore,she showed great patience in her long and hard learning period.

I have Iearned,above all,three Iessons from her story.First,she taught me that often the road to success is to face hardships bravely.Maybe you are born under an ill star yet you can stand a better chance than others.It is therefore important that you screw up your courage when courage is needed.Second,the impairment of part of her senses did not prevent her from Iearning:on the contrary,she had made continual efforts to go deeper into the realm of knowledge,and her perseverance had thus helped her overcome many handicaps.Third,she advised that we should make the most of our sense organs as if we would Iose them soon because this way we would observe the world more carefully than ever before.

The book is inspiring in that it is one brimming over with the unbending will of a gallant woman beset with seemingly insurmountable difficulties.I hope I can be as courageous as she.

妙语评析:这是一篇关于读书学习的说明文。文章第一句直接切入主题,接下来对书和主人公进行了简要介绍。第二段分别从面对困难、坚忍不拔、和珍惜我们的感官三个方面阐述了这本书对读者的影响。最后一段进行概括性说明。结尾处as……as的运用,与首段主题句相互照应,深化了主题,为短文画上了圆满的句号。文中用黑体标出的句子既丰富了文章的内容又保证了文章的连贯性。

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1._________is the most influential book in my Iife.

2.It abounds with_________.

3.I have Iearned,above all,three Iessons from_________.

4.The book is inspiring in that_________.

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Topic

_________is the most influential book in my Iife.It abounds with_________.

I have Iearned,above all,three Iessons from_________.First,_________.Second,_________.Third,_________.

The book is inspiring in that_________.I hope_________.

Direction:For this part,you are allowed 30minutes to write a composition on the topic Football.You should write no Iess than 120words,and you should base your composition on the outline(given in Chinese):

1.足球运动的兴起;

2.中国足球的展望;

3.足球的意义及影响。

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Football

Football is the most popular ball in the world.More and more people Iike watching football matches.They can’t sleep or eat when their teams are playing.They shout for their players.

In my opinion,many Chinese football player have done better match after match since the Professional Football league of China was set up.But we still have a Iong way to go to Asia and to the world.We should Iearn from foreign teams.Foreign players and coaches must be invited.